First DHV Story I Wrote ! Any good?

Switches:

Pre-Selected
Woman Emotions
Protector of Loved Ones

Story:

Hey, Are you jealous sometime?

HB: Blabla @*#$ it

Well i got a good girlfriend. Her name is *&*^
If she sees a girl is talking to her boyfriend she get so Jealous !

She wants to punish the girl all up haha
maybe even killing her hehe. I know shes a sweet girl,
but sometimes she get overrun by her own emotions.
At that point i have to calm her down. otherwise she goes into rage haha.

But now i get it, woman are emotional creatures and sometimes they go abit overboard.

Not bad at all man. I would probably at the end of that story, "We all get over run by our emotions some times though." to show willingness to emote.