Sounds good, give it some field testing and let us know how it works.
Personally, i love cold-readings...from routine based CR's to just flat out reading someone and being able to make valid statements about thier personality or calling them out on something.
However for routine based CR's the idea is this...
In a cold reading the idea is to make general statements about someone. Typically they should be positive things that no person would disagree with. Ocasioanlly you counter balance all the good stuff with a mildly negative or implied negative value statent.
Why?
Because it will cause people to further align with the positive comments you made. They will actually forget the negative comment, overlooking it because of all the wonderfully accurate nice stuff you said...
Essentially cold reading is a very thin, blurred line between bs'in and reading someone.
Here ill give you an example, this is directed at you...
"Its funny i can tell by the things you wrote here the type of character you have. I can tell your intellectual, that you like to aproach a problem and figure out the means to solve that issue and others like it. I see a inner confidence in your words that few people have. However you come accross as maybe being a young adult.
You seem to be well-rounded and enjoy going out and having fun just as much as you like staying in and relaxing. Your propably more intresting then you give yourself credit for, but you know deep down inside that you are an intresting person."
This wasnt a pre-rehersed CR, in fact half of it is just bs i made up, and half is actually things i take from what you wrote...figure'in which half is which ill leave upto u
But the underlying concept is similar, keep the overture positive, add into even a pre-rehersed CR stuff you notice on the fly. The more info you have the easier the readings are, so if you do the reading 30 seconds into the set or 3 mins in can make a huge difference.
In anycase back to your post, i htink its good id try it and adjust if needed. Hope this helps