My book, a free copy!

Ok, I think I've finally finished this thing. No, it's not a book on PUA. Right now it's a fiction book. It's what I've put two samples up of already. I'm looking for a couple of people to read through it to make sure it flows and makes sense. Make sure I haven't missed anything.

http://pua.substanceinfinity.com/media/WoetothePoor.pdf

Post your thoughts here, and thanks!

Note, the first paragraph is a synopsis of the story.

Thank Tripp, I've got a couple of other books that I'm reading atm but I should have your book finished by the end of next week.

One problem might be that you have a character named "Mr. Garrison" which is a funny character on south park so i lol'd everytime i saw mr. garrison in the text.

Not a necesity but you might want to consider changing his last name. Just because anyone who watches south park will laugh when they read it.

I couldn't help but laugh a bit at that as well but I can be a little imature

Thanks guys for reading, and for your feedback so far.

Damn LA! This has some makings in it. I get a sense of chaos that could take place. Some 1984 type happenings. I will read the whole book once finals are over. peace,lvoe and succe SS

Awesome.

Also, tell me, those who are reading it . . . Tom Garrison's office and office building near the beginning, should I describe those in more detail, or does it work the way it is?